Callousness of Heart

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Billy Bookmark
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Callousness of Heart

Post by Billy Bookmark » 10 Jul 2019, 13:36

One purpose of the heart
are the emotions we feel
Some good some bad
accepting what's real
When things go wrong
we close a door
Refusing to acknowledge
what hurt us before
We put up a wall
calling it strength
What we don't understand
are barriers at length
We forget how to love
We forget how to care
The price for protection
just doesn't seem fair
Instead of denying
embrace your pain
Yes it will hurt
but some how you gain
Reach out to others
when your world falls apart
Callouses are for hands
not for your heart

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Post by Nisha Ward » 11 Jul 2019, 18:00

There's something about the truth in this poem that affects mr greatly. Thank you.
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Post by Areej Tahir » 16 Jul 2019, 10:43

This poem left an impression on me. Loved it!

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Post by Kris5911 » 19 Jul 2019, 16:45

I like your thoughts in this poem. Good job with it.

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Post by mayangodm » 22 Jul 2019, 12:02

I've seen countless poems with the same topic; however, the last two lines are cute, good job :)

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Post by Monishka Sharma » 23 Jul 2019, 11:51

Truth is revealed about our barriers!!!!

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Post by Moodykelz_10 » 26 Aug 2019, 10:51

This one struck with me, opening the heart and not being scared of being hurt after being hurt is such a scary thing. Well written and good flow to it.

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Post by Ben Moore » 27 Aug 2019, 09:50

Great last two lines:
‘Callouses are for hands
Not for your heart’

Brilliant!
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Post by nicole-adrianne » 15 Oct 2019, 20:56

I love the last two lines of this. I'd like to write them down and put them up on my wall, as this is timely advice for me right now. Thank you so much for sharing this piece.
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One feels like a duck, splashing around in all this wet. And when one feels like a duck, one is happy!

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