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Honeydane
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TITLE: I AM (not) OKAY


I just found myself crying silently
Holding my breathe, gasping for air
Something feels heavy and grumpy
My heart's aches and I don't care.

They don't listen
For my heart supplication
They cannot discern
What's my realization.

I feel so lonely and isolated
Like I am not accepted, rejected
Why can't I feel any appreciation?
All I know is to hide my emotion.

This is the confidence I only have
To wear a smile like I'm alright
Pretending everything's okay
Acting like I had enough.
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This speaks to me so much. I’ve been feeling this way myself lately. Beautiful job, thank you
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Remarkable! It touches my herart.Nice wordings and inspiring thoughts.
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Beautiful job. I loved it, keep writing!
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Honeydane wrote: 15 May 2019, 14:13 TITLE: I AM (not) OKAY


I just found myself crying silently
Holding my breathe, gasping for air
Something feels heavy and grumpy
My heart's aches and I don't care.

They don't listen
For my heart supplication
They cannot discern
What's my realization.

I feel so lonely and isolated
Like I am not accepted, rejected
Why can't I feel any appreciation?
All I know is to hide my emotion.

This is the confidence I only have
To wear a smile like I'm alright
Pretending everything's okay
Acting like I had enough.
I love the choice of words in you piece, great work.
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Post by Andy37 »

Title: Peaceful

Chilly blue sky on a windy day
What lies within the infinite deep sea?
Calming thoughts fill my head
As the boat slowly leaves the bay
How can this day be such a perfect melody?
Such a day that leaves all problems forgotten and unsaid
This blissful feeling makes me want to stay
Are these tranquil waves the definition of serenity?
This day could only end with the heavenly view of the sunset
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