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A vicious cycle of love i see
A destruction of hope
A soundless plea

Hes lost his heart
Its in her grasp
His eyes are now blind
His face is a mask

She has won her prize
I have lost my friend
He chose his demise
It leads to the end

Why wont he listen
My brother he is
So caught up in
her eyes
her hair
her smell

She is a Beauty
But why cant he see
The web she has woven
Hes trapped like a flea

A man among men
Yet one among man
I wonder
I wonder
If this is goodbye

Or is it
The beginning?

Time will tell
We shall see
A man he may become
Or destroyed he shall be
Life is not a bed of roses its a valley of thorns twisting and tearing into the strands of time. But, in the middle of every valley their is a river. If you find that river follow it. For it shall lead you to the sea. Then you will finally be free.
-MO
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Post by reader »

Nice poem!
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Post by billrainier »

This is a awesome poem. keep it up.
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Post by mrsdalloway »

good poem, conflicting feelings come across quite clearly and nicely :)
'The word-coining genius, as if thought plunged into a sea of words and came up dripping'
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Post by prettyvicky »

nice poem. keep it up! :)
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Post by liquidgraph »

That is simply an amazing poem, I really like the feelings embedded in the words.
Great work, thank you for sharing
prettyvicky
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Post by prettyvicky »

maybe you can make this a song
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Post by Loops »

I like where this goes, but it seems like you may be forcing the rhyme. I look at meter and rhyme as the wrapping paper for a gift. They should fit what's inside without changing the gift to fit the package.
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