If Only

[thisgirl818]

I'm dying here with the thought of you
What day is it anyway?
I've been living in my own little life without you
I sleep in your side of the bed every night
Wearing the clothes you left me
Thinking that if only
What if only I just...
Ran away with you
Maybe it would have been better
And that living might be
Somehow like a bed of roses once again
I close my eyes or at least I try
And I see you standing, staring at me
With that wolfish smile on your face
I chuckled as I open my eyes
When tears start to flow and I pathetically reminisce
Of what could've been or should've
If I was only as brave as you.

[spencermack]

The reminiscing over a loved one lost is portrayed well in the poem. The struggle of the person still living is felt throughout, and the desperate plea to feel them close again is heartbreaking.

I like it. It makes me feel and care for the loved ones I still have with me.

[Kelanyloves]

This poem seems to be structured as a story or thought. The plot of the poem is basic but interesting. The poem would be more compelling if it were more complex and with intentional wording. Although the poem is very simple it still catches my attention. However, if it were more complex, and with more metaphors it would become better. I like it, sounds like something Iwould read on a collection of poetry.

[JhenneRhapsody1989]

The poem is simple. It makes me feel sad but at the same time I feel the love. It really struck my heart. This is an example of a masterpiece that I want to use in my acting/performance as a radio drama talent.

[Kelsey Fulton]

This poem is very raw and heartbreaking. I can feel the loss and grief. The last line is my favorite (it surprised me a little!) and makes me want more. Is the subject brave because they were able to get over the heartbreak quickly? Because they didn't feel the heartbreak? Because they were able to run away? I would love to hear more about the characteristics of the subject, such as your mention of "wolfish smile." Thanks for your bravery in sharing this poem!

[Artizi]

Though the poem is a bit simple, it's beautiful and heartfelt. Congrats!

[Osero]

The poem is simple and very well structured by your word choice. The theme is well portrayed and the mood is sad but still I can feel the love through it. Great piece of creativity.

[beccabecky]

It's a simple yet sweet poem, I truly enjoyed it. Keep writting, it shows you love doing it!

[Tobewankenobe]

So many elements of this are reflected in my own life with my partner, sleeping on their side of the bed, wearing leftover clothes. I'm getting a lot out of these.

[Aliciaroseperry1992]

Simplistic but still pulling on my heart strings- I really like the part about the partner coming back, the bed would once again be a bed of roses. Things are always more beautiful when we share it with the ones we love.