Dream On My Pillow

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Dream On My Pillow

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Just suppose that you took my pillow,
Will you let me, in your dreams, follow?
A soul of make-believe, that's me,
Class A, romantic fool, per se

How about, giving me yours to sleep
Will in my sleep, dreams of you I'll keep?
In a world of bloom, beautiful
Flowers for all, so plentiful;

How about, if we both sleep on one?
Seemed better than all sleeping I've done,
Might you think, there's more to whine,
As dreams, of ours, might all entwine?
"In the beginning was the word.........John 1:1"
...To delineate the times that lovers miss,
...A thousand dreams can't beat a single kiss.

-reyvrex (Love Sonnet 107)
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Amazing
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Sulemana Awal wrote: 07 Jan 2019, 09:21 Amazing
Thanks.
"In the beginning was the word.........John 1:1"
...To delineate the times that lovers miss,
...A thousand dreams can't beat a single kiss.

-reyvrex (Love Sonnet 107)
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Oh I like this!
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Backpackroses wrote: 08 Jan 2019, 13:10 Oh I like this!
Thanks for commenting. This is just a simple rhyming exercise done years ago.
"In the beginning was the word.........John 1:1"
...To delineate the times that lovers miss,
...A thousand dreams can't beat a single kiss.

-reyvrex (Love Sonnet 107)
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Peaceful.
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chroaks1 wrote: 09 Jan 2019, 17:14 Peaceful.
Thanks for the feedback.
"In the beginning was the word.........John 1:1"
...To delineate the times that lovers miss,
...A thousand dreams can't beat a single kiss.

-reyvrex (Love Sonnet 107)
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That is beautiful! I'm not really a poetry person, but I can enjoy poems like yours which are simple but powerful. Well done!
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Louanne Piccolo wrote: 11 Jan 2019, 11:27 That is beautiful! I'm not really a poetry person, but I can enjoy poems like yours which are simple but powerful. Well done!
Thanks for visiting. I am for the simple things, I detest complications. lol
"In the beginning was the word.........John 1:1"
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...A thousand dreams can't beat a single kiss.

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I love this! The rhyming pattern is fun, but the subject is beautiful. The lines are sometimes a little hard to follow, but that is part of what makes them captivating. I love the idea of sharing the pillow's dreams and all that! Very creative and inspiring! And I just absolutely love the first line! How it shyly and hesitantly presents the idea of the whole poem drew me in! Well done!
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ReyvrexQuestor Reyes wrote: 07 Jan 2019, 05:23 Just suppose that you took my pillow,
Will you let me, in your dreams, follow?
A soul of make-believe, that's me,
Class A, romantic fool, per se

How about, giving me yours to sleep
Will in my sleep, dreams of you I'll keep?
In a world of bloom, beautiful
Flowers for all, so plentiful;

How about, if we both sleep on one?
Seemed better than all sleeping I've done,
Might you think, there's more to whine,
As dreams, of ours, might all entwine?
Forgot.
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:!: so good. its like a desire to be able to be together and therefore such questions at the end. :D
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Angul Sonti wrote: 27 Jun 2020, 06:43 :!: so good. its like a desire to be able to be together and therefore such questions at the end. :D
Do you think there is a need for the question? Thanks for passing by.
"In the beginning was the word.........John 1:1"
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Samwisekoop wrote: 10 Jun 2020, 18:39
ReyvrexQuestor Reyes wrote: 07 Jan 2019, 05:23 Just suppose that you took my pillow,
Will you let me, in your dreams, follow?
A soul of make-believe, that's me,
Class A, romantic fool, per se

How about, giving me yours to sleep
Will in my sleep, dreams of you I'll keep?
In a world of bloom, beautiful
Flowers for all, so plentiful;

How about, if we both sleep on one?
Seemed better than all sleeping I've done,
Might you think, there's more to whine,
As dreams, of ours, might all entwine?
Forgot.
Haha, I like your comment -- forgot. This happens to me sometimes. I pressed the "Submit" button without first completing what I intended to write. Stay safe.
"In the beginning was the word.........John 1:1"
...To delineate the times that lovers miss,
...A thousand dreams can't beat a single kiss.

-reyvrex (Love Sonnet 107)
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Samwisekoop wrote: 10 Jun 2020, 18:38 I love this! The rhyming pattern is fun, but the subject is beautiful. The lines are sometimes a little hard to follow, but that is part of what makes them captivating. I love the idea of sharing the pillow's dreams and all that! Very creative and inspiring! And I just absolutely love the first line! How it shyly and hesitantly presents the idea of the whole poem drew me in! Well done!
This is meant to be humorous. Thank you for your generous views.
"In the beginning was the word.........John 1:1"
...To delineate the times that lovers miss,
...A thousand dreams can't beat a single kiss.

-reyvrex (Love Sonnet 107)
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