Promise
- ReyvrexQuestor Reyes
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Promise
Its worth dependent on integrity,
Reputation, the sum that is paid for,
Which may vouch for the debtor's purity;
As when lovers opt to pledge faithfulness,
Avowed themselves to mutual seclusion,
When hearts concerned profess exclusiveness,
Towards the sole object of their passion;
But a promise to be true incurs time,
The backdrop for its stage is the future,
Should it endure the span of a lifetime,
Life itself becomes its own adventure;
.......Then, when debtors renege and faith is lost,
.......Broken hearts chip in to shoulder the cost.
...To delineate the times that lovers miss,
...A thousand dreams can't beat a single kiss.
-reyvrex (Love Sonnet 107)
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Well-written critique. I am an amateur poet, or not really a poet at all. How will anyone know that he is one? And how will anyone know that the others are? I am of the opinion that just having a poem does not guaranty that one is a poet. That is, granting that what one has written is really a poem. So that leaves us two problems: To discern if the written piece is a poem and if the writer is a poet. Disregard all I've said. I just want to thank you for coming by.BrittaniDJ wrote: ↑02 Jan 2019, 17:40 This is really well-written. The idea of promise being an economic transaction of ethics is upheld throughout the poem and I commend you for that. Sometimes, amateur poets lose their train of thought. I do not know you, so, I apologize if you are not an amateur poet and actually well-publicized. The last line is really giving me pause. Not because it doesn't work. I think it does, but I am having to think about how it works and what the importance of it is and to what degree it speaks in my own history and experience. I think a poem should leave people having to think a bit. Having to ponder and self-reflect. Self-reflection leads to the purest learning. So, honestly, beautiful job.
...To delineate the times that lovers miss,
...A thousand dreams can't beat a single kiss.
-reyvrex (Love Sonnet 107)