That Demon Named Anxiety

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That Demon Named Anxiety

Post by Emi_Review » 28 Aug 2018, 06:43

Anxiety is a cruel cold demon,
Its possession surrounds my mind in a black mist,
turning and shaping me into a different being,
my body, now just a hollow vessel:

I'm scared to ask a question,
I'm scared to talk,
what embarrassing spew will rush out of my mouth today?
Who will I offend?
The demon clamps my mouth shut.

I make a tiny mistake,
the demon reminds me for hours later,
it keeps me tossing and turning at night,
taunting,
my eyes are black.

A group of people are laughing behind me,
oh God, are they laughing at me?
'Of course they are' the demon sneers.
My heart races, I feel dizzy, I feel weak.

I'm going to be a failure today,
I'm not good enough, smart enough,
enough.
A presentation in front of my peers?
I can't, I can't, I can't!
I clench my jaw, ball my fists, I feel sick.
Criticisms are like a dose of Holy water,
I recoil, cringe and burn in shame,
I knew I'd be a failure.

My friends ask me to go out,
claws dig into my mind,
I don't want to go but I can't say no.
We sit in a restaurant, everyone laughs around me,
I force a smile whilst worrying about how I'm eating.
'All eyes are on you' taunts the demon,
I only manage ten bites.

I'm a hostage to a demon,
it won't let me pick up a phone for help.
I'm trapped.
I need help.
I need an exorcist.

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Post by mac83 » 28 Aug 2018, 10:10

I really love this writing style and how you expressed how anxiety is. You summed it up perfectly.
Mac :techie-reference:

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Post by Emi_Review » 28 Aug 2018, 11:23

mac83 wrote:
28 Aug 2018, 10:10
I really love this writing style and how you expressed how anxiety is. You summed it up perfectly.
Thank you :D I'm glad I could portray it correctly, I used my own personal experience to write this but I know everyone has their own experiences. I feel like Anxiety and mental illness is now in the open more and it's nice that people suffering can open up and share their experiences and know they're not alone and that there is support if you need it (even if it's scary to ask for it).

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Post by mac83 » 29 Aug 2018, 13:31

It is definitely more open now and people can reach out for the help they need without feeling alienated or discriminating. Thank you for sharing!
Mac :techie-reference:

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Post by LucyFlawless78 » 29 Aug 2018, 14:14

I like the name of this one. Anxiety is a demon. I have it & it scares me sometime s

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Post by Emi_Review » 29 Aug 2018, 15:49

mac83 wrote:
29 Aug 2018, 13:31
It is definitely more open now and people can reach out for the help they need without feeling alienated or discriminating. Thank you for sharing!
I'm glad it is open :) Thank you for commenting!

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Post by Emi_Review » 30 Aug 2018, 03:49

LucyFlawless78 wrote:
29 Aug 2018, 14:14
I like the name of this one. Anxiety is a demon. I have it & it scares me sometime s
It is scary sometimes, how something we can't even see can dictate the smallest things in our lives

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Post by Billy Bookmark » 09 Jul 2019, 22:07

Related rather well with this one. After time one comes to expect the demon and on those rare occasion he isn't there it makes you wonder did I wear him out? Lot of feelings in this poem

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Post by LinaMueller » 09 Jul 2019, 22:34

You summed it up perfectly. Well done.
Heart! We will forget him!
You an I, tonight!
You may forget the warmth he gave,
I will forget the light.

When you have done, pray tell me
That I my thoughts may dim;
Haste! lest while you're lagging.
I may remember him!

Emily Dickinson

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Post by Esme1992 » 14 Jul 2019, 15:02

Especially relate to the 3rd verse. I am still worried about a mistake I made at work over a month ago, I know it is silly but the feeling just won't go away...

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Post by Areej Tahir » 16 Jul 2019, 10:39

Oh My God, this was such a good way to picture anxiety for people who can't understand it

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Post by JD Stanley » 24 Jul 2019, 22:25

Very well described. I'd say you hit that right on the head (speaking from personal experience). Nice job. :)

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Post by Sinclairess » 31 Jul 2019, 20:10

Emi_Review wrote:
28 Aug 2018, 06:43
I don't want to go but I can't say no.
I love this line. It perfectly describes how I feel when I just wanna be alone and deal with the demon.

Keep it up! Good work.
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Post by Moodykelz_10 » 25 Aug 2019, 16:51

Wow this hit home a lot, it perfectly explained some of the emotions people go through with anxiety. The title is also very powerful.

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Post by usmistry72 » 31 Aug 2019, 19:59

It's a different type of poem. You express about life anxiety, how you suffer from anxiety, and how it destroy a life also.Finally anxity be your Enimy. Basically this poem is around over psychological activities. At last you need some one's hand. Good poem, I like also, better try to more communicate eatch line.

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