A Doctor To His Love

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A Doctor To His Love

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Love is a malady of which I'm sick
Now very chronic and getting acute
Feel my neck, phone another doctor quick
Your touch could make my aches to joy transmute

Now press upon my breast your stethoscope
You'll know how so irregular I breathe
It is not due to some Asthma, I hope
That when you're near I hyperventilate

And oftentimes, I'd steal a kiss from you
So sweet, addictive, that I am afraid
Too much sugar makes diabetes due
But I feared most: my fault, you might upbraid

Now feel my quickened pulse; is there a cure?
Aside from pills and that magnetic band?
It's symptomatic of my love so pure
'Adrenalin rush' when you held my hand

I should be confined now, I'm pretty sure
Before my ailment would have reached stage two
You choose a place which we can now procure
Ward or ICU just to be with you.
"In the beginning was the word.........John 1:1"
...To delineate the times that lovers miss,
...A thousand dreams can't beat a single kiss.

-reyvrex (Love Sonnet 107)
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The world is love.. Without love in this world no humans, no help... And we also sick in love the way out is to be very close to your lover or get in contact, we all experience love in different ways..
But your first love was not on drugs and treatment but of care and emotional feelings
So we can address our love life to the fullest
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adehoun27 wrote: 24 May 2018, 16:32 The world is love.. Without love in this world no humans, no help... And we also sick in love the way out is to be very close to your lover or get in contact, we all experience love in different ways..
But your first love was not on drugs and treatment but of care and emotional feelings
So we can address our love life to the fullest
Thanks for your feedback.
"In the beginning was the word.........John 1:1"
...To delineate the times that lovers miss,
...A thousand dreams can't beat a single kiss.

-reyvrex (Love Sonnet 107)
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adehoun27 wrote: 24 May 2018, 16:32 The world is love.. Without love in this world no humans, no help... And we also sick in love the way out is to be very close to your lover or get in contact, we all experience love in different ways..
But your first love was not on drugs and treatment but of care and emotional feelings
So we can address our love life to the fullest
This is only a humorous take, following the pattern of classical poems, somewhat similar to "A Passionate Shepherd To His Love" or the like.
"In the beginning was the word.........John 1:1"
...To delineate the times that lovers miss,
...A thousand dreams can't beat a single kiss.

-reyvrex (Love Sonnet 107)
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