The Drunken Sonnet

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The Drunken Sonnet

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The Drunken Sonnet

When in my lowest stock of wine and praise,
I just content myself with this cheap beer
And wish in some hotel I with my raise,
In spirits high, enjoying a good cheer;
But most I get from work that I contend
Is reprimand from bossy chief and staff,
And scorn from lady love whom I pretend
To have, when all I get from her is chaff;
And thinking of this love, this love of fools,
That angels find not worthy of a cent,
Or else, meagerly priced as would cheap wools,
I wonder how my glossy life have went;
…. To see her face, and hear her terse tirade,
…. I might with bandits give my life to trade.

--- reyvrex questor reyes
"In the beginning was the word.........John 1:1"
...To delineate the times that lovers miss,
...A thousand dreams can't beat a single kiss.

-reyvrex (Love Sonnet 107)
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Post by DATo »

*LOLOLOLOLOL* ...... GREAT!

I can imagine Shakespeare turning over in his grave.

Thanks for the laugh. I needed it. [:- )
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Thanks, DATo, good buddy. That is a priceless encouragement.

-- 22 Oct 2017, 21:33 --

DATo, let me share this sonnet for a good laugh:

The Middle Path

The road to Hell is wide and traveled well,
With timbrels, gay, and trumpets blowing loud,
And souls won't know, if when, and how they fell,
Their souls roasting, their bodies walk still proud:
But gate of Heaven opens but a slit,
Admitting few who, hardly, might squeeze in,
While Satan looks, and ready with his spit,
In case the Keeper overlooks a sin:
Might we do well, threading the middle path?
Not being vain, nor be too much a saint,
To not deserve the Devil's fiery wrath,
Yet short of being heart without a taint:
.....I hope, when Fate would finally decide,
.....I'm not despised by friends from either side.

by reyvrex
"In the beginning was the word.........John 1:1"
...To delineate the times that lovers miss,
...A thousand dreams can't beat a single kiss.

-reyvrex (Love Sonnet 107)
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This is a great thread - and here's one from me ....

I had a dream last night, some would say good,
one in which my earthly life was through,
and Peter said 'There is a place for you'
as at that pearly portal, tense, I stood ....

I'd partly not believed that it was true,
or if it was, had wondered if I would
make it to that wondrous neighbourhood,
Pete said ....'One thing, I don't know if you knew ...

But we have had to give the books away,
you see it was so packed and crowded here,
so many newcomers had come to stay ...

they could be a bad influence, I fear ....'
Well, there was only one thing I could say...
'Then I'd prefer the other place, it's clear..!'
An Eye for an Eye only ends up making the whole world blind.

Mahatma Gandhi
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Post by ReyvrexQuestor Reyes »

@Lincolnshirelass, splendid Petrarchan sonnet. Witty.
"In the beginning was the word.........John 1:1"
...To delineate the times that lovers miss,
...A thousand dreams can't beat a single kiss.

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Post by ReyvrexQuestor Reyes »

DATo wrote: 22 Oct 2017, 05:48 *LOLOLOLOLOL* ...... GREAT!

I can imagine Shakespeare turning over in his grave.

Thanks for the laugh. I needed it. [:- )
Haha Buddy, read Sonnet 130 of Shakespeare, you will find more.
"In the beginning was the word.........John 1:1"
...To delineate the times that lovers miss,
...A thousand dreams can't beat a single kiss.

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Post by ReyvrexQuestor Reyes »

Please omit the comma after fools in line #9.
On line #12, my editor said had should be used instead of have

"I wonder how my glossy life had went;"

Thank you.
"In the beginning was the word.........John 1:1"
...To delineate the times that lovers miss,
...A thousand dreams can't beat a single kiss.

-reyvrex (Love Sonnet 107)
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ReyvrexQuestor Reyes wrote: 26 Nov 2018, 09:41 Please omit the comma after fools in line #9.
On line #12, my editor said had should be used instead of have

"I wonder how my glossy life had went;"
Grammarly corrected went into gone
....sorry out of rhyme.

Thank you.
"In the beginning was the word.........John 1:1"
...To delineate the times that lovers miss,
...A thousand dreams can't beat a single kiss.

-reyvrex (Love Sonnet 107)
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