A Dry Life Without Tears

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Re: A Dry Life Without Tears

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Deep words👏. What you wrote is true. Keep going.
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What a one-of-a-kind masterpiece. It was a quick read, but it packed a punch and had a lot of passion. You did a fantastic job at conveying the message without any ambiguity. Keep up the good work and keep creating.
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Nice poem that portrays that a cross is a prerequisite for a crown.
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"The falling
The sunset
The dark night"

A lot of melancholic episodes at the seaside watching the sunset...i've been felt
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This poem also reminds me of the lines "freedom's just another word for nothing left to lose/nothin' ain't worth nothin' but it's free" from "Me and Bobby McGee", a song that I think was written by Janis Joplin but I am more familiar with Roger Miller's version of the song.
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Nice work. Can't say much but I felt it.
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Deep with meaning.
"Facts don't care about feelings." Ben Shapiro
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A great poem with a great meaning, the satisfaction absolutely comes from the feeling that you really tried hard, did your best so you deserve it...
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This is all what life is all about. The picture of all rossiness of life is unreal.
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Beautiful poem! I also love your other poem “I Cried Today”. Both of those made me emotional. You have honestly expressed your deepest pain. Remember that one day: “God will wipe every tear from your eyes. There will be no more death or mourning or crying or pain, for the old order of things has passed away.”‭‭ Revelation‬ ‭21‬:‭4‬ ‭
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Hmmm, this made me smile. I was just transported to my childhood for a couple seconds :)
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I love it.
Maybe the beauty of reality is the blood
This part reminds me of my mom who shed blood just to brought me in this world.
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Post by Stephanie Runyon »

Everyone is born and everyone dies. However, the struggle through life, ups, and downs is what makes life worthwhile. If tears are not shed in joy or sadness, then you are not really feeling and that is tragic. This poem is the epitome of this in exceptional words.
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I loved this line, "Triumph without challenge: hollow, unreal," as it encourages one to accept life's challenges.
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Post by DATo »

I don't know how I missed this when you first posted it. It appears I am very late to the party.

This poem speaks to me as its underlying theme reflects a cornice in the temple of my own philosophy. One cannot appreciate the joys in life without the struggle to achieve them. H. G. Wells once said, "What on earth would a man do with himself if something did not stand in his way.", and Robert Louis Stevenson once put it, "To travel hopefully is a better thing than to arrive, and true success is to be found in the labor." But I think my favorite saying - one which I learned many decades ago is, "In order to experience the miracle of the sunrise we must stand for awhile in the darkness." - Sapna Reddy

And then, of course, there is Scott:

"In a dark muddy forest,
A wet dirty smile."
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