Window Pain

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Window Pain

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(I wrote this when I was 17 and have just found it when looking through old files)

The raindrops fell down my windowpane
Spitting on my reputation and sanity
Melodrama filled the eyes of onlookers
Their quick hands comforted my
‘Deep, deep pain’

The raindrops fell down my windowpane
They did not touch me
I did not feel their coldness
For the storm was outside
Inside: was peaceful

He was kissing her in the rain
Oh, idyllic passion!
Each droplet cascading down her serpentine skin
Surely a dagger to my
Wretched, trampled heart

He was kissing her in the rain
Wherein this statement lies passion?
Their water did not dampen
The lively flames dancing
To the steady beat of my heart

I refuse
To blame each raindrop
On his mistakes
He is not nature, not
My world.

‘Pitter patter
Titter tatter’
Their sympathy as fluid
As the water they gush over

He is outside;
I look within
There is my fire.
Immune
To your foolish rain
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Post by Theana De lima Araujo »

Wow, this is beautiful, I love how the rain imagery carries through the poem. Do you still write poetry?
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