TREASURE BOX

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Grace Abel-Ehigiator
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TREASURE BOX

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A new box of Treasure
waiting to be opened
As we prepare to start
The curious will be excited
The explorer will find
The discoverer will win
Take the lead
Dive off the 'cliff'
Spread your wings
Make 'em your parachute
Fly..............
Grace
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I like the metaphor you used! However, I feel like the first two lines don't tie into the rest of the poem's meaning...Is there a reason for this? My favorite lines are, "The curious will be excited,
The explorer will find,
The discoverer will win.." Well done!
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Post by daphne_asir »

The poem was amazing! I love how it can mean so many different things.
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