Broken Bones

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Broken Bones

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Sticks and stones
Have broken bones
But words can kill the laughter.

Dust and dirt
Don't cause much hurt
But sneers can choke the joy.

Snow and rain
Can't cause a maim
But thoughtless deeds can cause a storm.
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Words and deeds can bring more havoc than the natural elements. It seems the hurt we suffer are mostly man-made, more than that caused by nature. Deep poem.
"In the beginning was the word.........John 1:1"
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This poem can be felt at a deeper level. I liked how you compared natural and man made things.
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ReyvrexQuestor Reyes wrote: 30 May 2020, 02:18 Words and deeds can bring more havoc than the natural elements. It seems the hurt we suffer are mostly man-made, more than that caused by nature. Deep poem.
Yes, the tongue is a double-edged sword. We need to be carful what we say to others for it can deeply hurt them. Thank you for stopping by and commenting! :D
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Sumansona1344 wrote: 30 May 2020, 05:23 This poem can be felt at a deeper level. I liked how you compared natural and man made things.
Thank you!
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Samwisekoop wrote: 30 May 2020, 12:05
ReyvrexQuestor Reyes wrote: 30 May 2020, 02:18 Words and deeds can bring more havoc than the natural elements. It seems the hurt we suffer are mostly man-made, more than that caused by nature. Deep poem.
Yes, the tongue is a double-edged sword. We need to be careful what we say to others for it can deeply hurt them. Thank you for stopping by and commenting! :D
Yes, you are right. We should be careful to make our words tasteful enough -- just in case we have to take it back and eat it up.
"In the beginning was the word.........John 1:1"
...To delineate the times that lovers miss,
...A thousand dreams can't beat a single kiss.

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