BRING BACK THE DAYS

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Adeyemi Oba
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BRING BACK THE DAYS

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Bring back the days
When love, a strong trait binds us together
Tranquillity among everyone co-exist
Peace our quest in pursuit of one another
When unity, comfort all dwell in our midst

Bring back the days
When elders are last resort for unbiased justice
And none trends in each others suspect
Existence not in diversity or malice
Because authorities are accord real respect

Bring back the days
When husbands commit to their responsibilities
Prompt providers and protectors they are as heads
The right conformity they observe along side dauntless duties
Answerable they are to anyone who their aids he needs 

Bring back the days
When wives see their husbands as someone supreme
Submission, a culture always in practice
Proper children training, they prioritize to the brim
In return is lasting love that surface

Bring back the days
When parents to children are gods
Respect for the above, the discipline they imbibe
Errands for parents against all odds
Who's in the garden, regardless tribe

The love that once binded us now scarce
The tranquillity we once held dear turn truncated
Derail we have from the comfort and unity we used to embrace
The peace we used to pursue and clamour for forfeited
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Post by nicole-adrianne »

This feels very tribal to me. It really conflicts with typical Western values of individuality and independence. It makes me stop and think about which values are better.
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One feels like a duck, splashing around in all this wet. And when one feels like a duck, one is happy!
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