The Girl Upstairs

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scarlettdragone
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The Girl Upstairs

Post by scarlettdragone » 01 Dec 2019, 10:04

I've always been so confused.
Confused
and
conflicted.
Always questioning who I am and what I think and what I want and what I am.
But confusion doesn't exist when the girl walks
up
the
stairs.
I don't know her name.
I don't know anything about her.
All I know, is she walks up the stairs and my eyes trail after her, following.
Her hair bounces in ripples.
Her lips twitch into an almost smile.
Her eyes flash briefly of summers.
And she walks up the stairs.
Up and away.

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Post by Daniel Muky » 14 Dec 2019, 17:17

That should have been more confusion for me.haha..but nice

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Post by nfdoughe » 15 Dec 2019, 19:05

This is a beautiful sentiment. Nicely written!
"Man is least himself when he talks in his own person. Give him a mask, and he will tell you the truth."
~Oscar Wilde

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Post by nicole-adrianne » 01 Jan 2020, 13:57

This poem proves how many secret, strange admirers we all have each day.
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One feels like a duck, splashing around in all this wet. And when one feels like a duck, one is happy!

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