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lostalaskayoung
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Post by lostalaskayoung »

I wrote something today. It is the most random and pettiest of things but I guess I love what I wrote. Here's it:
I detox people because in the end it hurts
Every bit of it does.
I don't fear heartbreak
I don't fear getting over people all over again
All I'm afraid of is letting my heart befriend another heart with all the love
With all the affection it held
Emptying it and pouring it to the other
And in the end
In the end when everything is destined to fall apart
In the end when everything is shattered catastrophically
That's typical. We befriend people knowing that one day we'll have to let go of them, don't we nowadays?
We make promises. We have our vows. We make our bond the strongest. We make it so strong not even realising how things will be when this shine, the glow will begin to fade.
Not even realising that all the shimmering and glimmer has to fade.
Everything has to fall apart.
Every bond. Every person. Just everything. Us. You. Him. Her. Everybody. Everyone.
Obvious sh*t. But that's not what I fear people.
I fear my heart turning into a tremendously cold place. after the aforementioned.
Resembling those ice forests with no vegetation no life.
And that's something you should be fearful of.
Because darkness will take the better part of you later.
Sunlight would no more penetrate through and make you feel warm.
Cold. Bitter cold. Everywhere.
I detox people.
Don't let them in at all.
Because if there won't be no beginning how will there be an end?
No end. No darkness. No cold.
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Post by Dorisaoliveros »

The poem is great and hurts but its full of inspiration to everybody who reads,thank you for wroting the poem
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Post by vcg »

Lovely poem
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I like the amount of detail and duress. Definitely a talented writer!
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Post by nicole-adrianne »

This reminds me of what I said to my best friend this week: "Everyone except you is just transient. They come in and out, and after a while I expect that anyone I meet won't still be a part of my life two years from now." I'm glad I'm not alone!
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