Two chirping birds

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Two chirping birds

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Two Chirping Birds

On tree so high beautiful and green ,
sat two birds listening melodious wind,
Down shines the river crystal clear and clean.


One boy came started throwing stones at  them,
Afraid and worried they flew from there,
What a bad boy, such a shame.


Near a river was a bog,  
while playing around boy got stuck,
to get out, he tried a lot and slog .


That flying birds, saw him stuck,
Forgetting about stones, they flew to find help,
One mile away found a man, it was good luck.


Insisting that man to follow them,
Two birds started chirping around his head,
near came the bog, man saw the boy,
saved his life but boy was half dead.

Such a courageous deed, done by birds,
But still their story remains unheard,
Still around that tree, can hear birds chirps.

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Nice poetry!
I believe that their story will not be unheard anymore.😊
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That's a great poem. A simple story, but it captures so much. Congratulations!

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A lovely poem! I really enjoyed the words and the story. There are a number of grammatical errors, though. You will be a wonderful English-language poet with just a little bit of study :)
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nicole-adrianne wrote:
15 Oct 2019, 20:52
A lovely poem! I really enjoyed the words and the story. There are a number of grammatical errors, though. You will be a wonderful English-language poet with just a little bit of study :)
I am glad you like this poem. I will try to eliminate mistakes. Thank you for stopping in and commenting.

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Ekta Swarnkar wrote:
14 Sep 2019, 11:52
Nice poetry!
I believe that their story will not be unheard anymore.😊
Thank you!

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Juliet+1 wrote:
21 Sep 2019, 14:14
That's a great poem. A simple story, but it captures so much. Congratulations!
Thank you for stopping in and commenting! I am happy you liked it! :)

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