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Neha++
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Reaching to others was the aim
Trying again and again, nothing was gained
Confined yourself in the snood
Still burning in the flames of solitude
Oh tell me, what keeps you preclude?

Others staring at you, but what you think
Faces in crowd, gives a wink
Slice of the life, you are longing for
No one around, for you to adore
Please tell me, your minds war.

Passing the thoughts with each breathe
All tangled thoughts, just making unrest
Standing in crowd, still feeling alone
I know you want to be, everyone's ozone.
Tell me! Why you are hiding it from all?
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Post by nicole-adrianne »

Love the line about ozone. What is a snood?
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One feels like a duck, splashing around in all this wet. And when one feels like a duck, one is happy!
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Beautiful rhymes. Deep topic. Skillful delivery. Luvvv it!
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Post by Tobewankenobe »

Elegant delivery of your message.
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