Blood or bile

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Ashley Louise
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Blood or bile

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Brazen skin, but under the cracks I see silk;
rusted and darkened, breaking at the seams.

The feeling is familiar, but within the grooves,
running my fingers along a well-known plane,
I become lost, confused;
naked and unprepared against the differences.

But I submerge deeper, same eyes, same mouth, same voice;
age-old antiquities that are invaluable to me.

But silver tongue, soft spoken, words pour into my ears.
the bombardment insistent;
the quiet things that no one knows float to the surface.
With hearts, beating blood or bile, never both.

Piano key teeth bit the bullet and shattered the melody
that was keeping her on her toes; watching from a distance,
into oceanic eyes, counting everything breath with ignominy.

Staring up at the ashen sky waiting for rain to wash her away;
she crawled to the sea.
"We are what we pretend to be, so we must be careful about what we pretend to be." - Kurt Vonnegut

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Post by nicole-adrianne »

I love this and will continue to ponder the full meaning of your piece. The blood and bile line is reminiscent of the 4 temperaments, choleric, and...the other three...that I don't remember 😂 but the concepts were based on a hypothetical imbalance of bodily fluids. Is that what you had in mind when naming this poem?
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Post by Usha+P »

Holding a very deep meaning which i shall have to sit and ponder about.

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