Perfection is not ours

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Amenrodion
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Perfection is not ours

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Oh, to be flawless to you,
Without blemish to you,
Without fault to you,
The one whom I love

When you gaze upon me, my beloved
I wonder what you see
Do you see only my brokenness
Only my imperfection,
Only my flaws
Only my faults?
Is that why I am not enough?
Is that why I will never be enough?
Will I always be inadequate to you?

But my beloved, you too are flawed
You too are stained
You too are fallible
But you will always be enough
See, if only we could be perfect
But perfection is not ours

Perfection will never be ours
And you are perfect to me
In your imperfection
Would that I too could
Be perfect to you
In my imperfection
Because you see, my darling
Perfection is not ours!
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JessChang
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Post by JessChang »

I love how you made define perfection into beauty!!❤️
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Post by sunmuth »

I really liked this poem :) Well done
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Post by Sampsonbaby+ »

I love the depth and beauty of your poem!
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I love it. I like how you went into the idea of insecurities and perfections. It's such human nature to view the person they love as so much more than they are and to second guess yourself in comparison.
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Post by nicole-adrianne »

It's so sad to see people in unbalanced relationships where one is so clearly in love, and the other is merely settling. That's the story I feel in this poem. Yearning.
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One feels like a duck, splashing around in all this wet. And when one feels like a duck, one is happy!
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This is perfectly beautiful. Nice work.
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