Use this forum to post poetry that you have written. This is for getting comments and constructive feedback. This is for original, creative works. You must post the actual text, no links. Only one poem per topic please.
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Post by MdNickez » 05 Aug 2019, 20:37

If I could count them
They’re like the stars
The sands o’ this earth
If I could not count them
They’re like the sands
The stars o’ heaven-
Children o’ the world
Wide-eyed in their pursuits
For life

In bounty
And or in amenities scarce
Plates served
Or in pans broken
Dashed hopes will rise again
Every second’s a period of change
Expectations may in turbulence be
Greatest tempests will always come low

Sands and stars
Will tell
Our stories
Where we come
Wherefore we’re bound
This moment is infinite
Same as of life.


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Post by Juliet+1 » 12 Aug 2019, 21:05

I really like the first stanza, kept reading it over and over and smiling a lot. If you wanted, you could even use just that first stanza as a separate short poem. Maybe?

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Post by Moodykelz_10 » 25 Aug 2019, 16:57

Yes I agree the first verse was beautiful, I think that on it's own would be perfect. :) loved it.

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