"Silence"
- Abby121
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"Silence"
Ending in beautiful agony.
Eyes a murky grey riddled with drowning ember
A quiet whisper
A tearful gasp
A wonderful cry
And an eye rests in my palm,
Unblinking,
Still.
A burning chuckle creeps from my throat
Ashes
Ashes
We all fall down
- lennycamacho2019
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I like this. It denotes pain in making speech happen with words like sliver, burning, and ashes. Dark and concise, a little diamond in the rough.
The way you punctuated it though might look accidental, and it kinda threw me off a couple times focusing more on that than in the message. Good job though.
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