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Use this forum to post poetry that you have written. This is for getting comments and constructive feedback. This is for original, creative works. You must post the actual text, no links. Only one poem per topic please.
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mayangodm
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Post by mayangodm »

you gotta listen, I've come to say
to tell you the gold rush is over man
it's time to go home, maybe hand in hand
with a corpse
but hand in hand nonetheless
Home is waiting as you can tell and
people are leaving your garden.
take what you want as long as it's yours and don't forget your head
take its hand, gentle now,
and guide that corpse home
You can't stay, there's no gold in the waters,
you can't keep holding onto dust
It's only fools now, on the ground.
Take its hand, hold it close, make sure it follows,
we might be back.
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Tobewankenobe
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Post by Tobewankenobe »

Is the corpse a metaphor for the gold, and the dried up dreams of panhandlers?
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