Don't you dare!

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Don't you dare!

Post by April Ruvs » 13 Jul 2019, 11:34

Don't u dare steal my shine and make it your own, don't you dare take my thunder and make it roar for you, don't you dare drain me of my rain to water your withered soul don't you dare remove the darkness, the little light will flicker nomore, don't you dare strip my dignity to cloak your tarnished livelihood, don't you dare compare your dimwitted self to my superiority. Don't you dare challenge my intellect it wasn't perfected overnight. Don't you dare
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Post by rumik » 13 Jul 2019, 16:30

Love how bold and confident you sound. Good job with finding the strength to write this, I have a feeling it must have been very cathartic for you.

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Post by April Ruvs » 13 Jul 2019, 23:45

rumik wrote: ↑
13 Jul 2019, 16:30
Love how bold and confident you sound. Good job with finding the strength to write this, I have a feeling it must have been very cathartic for you.
Thank you so much. It really was. Everytime I write it makes me feel a little lighter.
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Post by Areej Tahir » 16 Jul 2019, 10:43

wow this was so strong. I won't ever dare πŸ˜‚

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Post by April Ruvs » 17 Jul 2019, 07:18

Areej Tahir wrote: ↑
16 Jul 2019, 10:43
wow this was so strong. I won't ever dare πŸ˜‚
Hahaha πŸ˜‚ thank you Areej. I'm glad you liked it.
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Post by Aniza Butt » 01 Aug 2019, 10:19

How powerful!!! I can literally feel this poem..good luck πŸ‘πŸ‘πŸ‘πŸ‘
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Post by kdevilbiss » 14 Aug 2019, 22:35

I love the way it's formatted! It really fits the tone of the poem. It's meant to be shouted at someone without taking a breath, in my mind!

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Post by Moodykelz_10 » 25 Aug 2019, 16:45

Wow i felt every word of this.

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Post by April Ruvs » 27 Aug 2019, 13:54

Aniza Butt wrote: ↑
01 Aug 2019, 10:19
How powerful!!! I can literally feel this poem..good luck πŸ‘πŸ‘πŸ‘πŸ‘
Thank you Aniza😊
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Post by April Ruvs » 27 Aug 2019, 13:55

kdevilbiss wrote: ↑
14 Aug 2019, 22:35
I love the way it's formatted! It really fits the tone of the poem. It's meant to be shouted at someone without taking a breath, in my mind!
Thank you kdevilbiss, that's exactly what it was suppose to be, shouting at someone.
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Post by April Ruvs » 27 Aug 2019, 13:57

Moodykelz_10 wrote: ↑
25 Aug 2019, 16:45
Wow i felt every word of this.
Thank you Moodykelz, I'm glad you liked it.
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Post by nicole-adrianne » 15 Oct 2019, 20:55

This reminds me of my friend's writing style! I would recommend running this through a grammar check to catch any unwanted errors ("nomore" should be "no more"), but I really feel the emotion in this piece.
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One feels like a duck, splashing around in all this wet. And when one feels like a duck, one is happy!

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Post by April Ruvs » 23 Oct 2019, 00:32

nicole-adrianne wrote: ↑
15 Oct 2019, 20:55
This reminds me of my friend's writing style! I would recommend running this through a grammar check to catch any unwanted errors ("nomore" should be "no more"), but I really feel the emotion in this piece.
Thank you Nicole-Adrianne. I'm glad you like it. Thank you for the advice.
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Post by timur777 » 24 Dec 2019, 22:39

Unique topic. I like the message in it. Well written. Thanks for sharing!

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Post by April Ruvs » 11 Jan 2020, 17:06

timur777 wrote: ↑
24 Dec 2019, 22:39
Unique topic. I like the message in it. Well written. Thanks for sharing!
Thank you timur777
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