Words to Ponder

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Billy Bookmark
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Words to Ponder

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You can lead a horse to water
but you can't make him drink
You can try to teach an idiot
but you can't make him think
You can make a lot of money
and still be in debt
or mix a dry martini
even though it's wet
Relaxing in a desert
can still be considered chillin
Some girls might say no
even when their willing
True meaning in a poem
is only an illusion
What's enlightenment for one
to another is confusion
A few silly verses
there is no hidden link
A writers sense of humor
designed to make you think

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Post by Aqui08 »

it is a nice poem! the writer wants us to know that the earth go round whether we like it or not so we must always seem to fit for everyhting and must be ready in change!

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Post by Areej Tahir »

Oooo I really liked the flipped after half of the verses!

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Post by mayangodm »

Dang.

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Post by Monishka Sharma »

Every line is full of humor and logic. It is beautiful in its honesty. And the last line about writers is the most punching line of this poem. It's a beautiful piece.

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Post by Kate_But_Not_Kaitlyn »

Noice :D

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Post by elenabell »

I love this! A joy to read. Short and snappy, and so damn true.

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Post by Sinclairess »

Well done! I love it because it stresses ambiguity. Grey instead of black and white.
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Post by Moodykelz_10 »

Got me thinking

mission accomplished.

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Post by Ben Moore »

Haha this made me chuckle! Short and sweet but very memorable!

The only thing I would say is that I think it should say ‘they’re willing’ as in ‘they are’ willing. Otherwise it means ‘even if the willing that belongs to them’. Hope that makes sense!
'All bad poetry springs from genuine feeling' - Oscar Wilde
'Am reading more Oscar Wilde. What a tiresome, affected sod' - Noël Coward

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awsm poem..i enjoyed reading it.

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Post by Aditi Sapate »

That is such a beautiful poem! It had me marvelling at the poet's creativity. Every verse seems to make a lot of sense, and it sure brought a smile to my face!

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Post by mddodgen »

Great rhythm to the prose. Thank you for sharing.

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Post by nicole-adrianne »

I love the rhythm and the humor, even the irreverence 😆 it got deep fast, but never lost its lightheartedness!
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One feels like a duck, splashing around in all this wet. And when one feels like a duck, one is happy!

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Post by Tobewankenobe »

Very nice piece, I like the turn you took with the euphemisms.

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