No Sleep Train (original poem)

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BrittaniDJ
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No Sleep Train (original poem)

Post by BrittaniDJ » 23 Jun 2019, 23:53

No Sleep Train

Up and down and sideways
Spinning like a hurricane
Don't know where to turn
Don't know how to leave this highway.

Thoughts keep running through my brain
Can't turn them off,
Can't make them go away
I'm on this 90-mile an hour,
Ghosting through the night,
No sleep train.

When right and wrong are clear
Decisions can be made
No hesitations there
The path is straight ahead

There's no compass here
The monitor's been broken
I'm lost inside a messy sphere
Where right and wrongs exploded.

Thoughts running through my brain
Can't turn them off
Can't make them go away
I'm on this 90-mile an hour,
Ghosting through the night,
No sleep train.

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Post by Lil_ momma2015 » 24 Jun 2019, 09:58

I really like this poem... Reminds me alot of me n my life I'm a mother of two boys n don't sleep much

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Post by BrittaniDJ » 24 Jun 2019, 10:57

Wow! What an amazing job. I will pray you get more sleep! Thank you for complimenting my poem. I'm glad you found something that spoke to you!

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Post by ErikaP13 » 24 Jun 2019, 17:18

Really well done. As a serial insomniac, I associate with this on a cellular level.

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Post by Billy Bookmark » 03 Jul 2019, 21:26

Haven't rode that train much but I know many people who catch it nightly. Good poem

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