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Devansh Saini 123
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Post by Devansh Saini 123 »

You are my love
You are my dove,
When you make me fool
I feel so cool,
Then i've only one tool
To make me cruel.

You are so cute
And most beautiful you are,
Just come with me
And seat with me in the car.
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Post by tlamlehaa »

It was okay. I didn't understand some of the lines and how it went with everything, but besides that it was good.
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The part where you say "when you make me fool I feel so cool" doesn't really make sense to me, and contradicts what you say later with "I've only one tool to make me cruel." Other than that it was interesting.
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