"Seduction"

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JhenneRhapsody1989
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"Seduction"

Post by JhenneRhapsody1989 »

" Seduction"

You're a Goddess sent from above and your Beauty is hard to ignore.
You're one of a kind bring me to temptation and like a fire burning me whole.
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Ashley_Skyler
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Post by Ashley_Skyler »

i like it nice use of relative feeling
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Post by Tobewankenobe »

It feels a bit unfinished.
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Post by Jhenne_Rhapsody »

Thank you for feed back. It's been a long time. I will take it as a compliment and motivation. It's time to sharpen my mind again.
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Post by NerdyAsh677 »

Nice metaphor but honestly it may sound like it but ignore and whole seems like doesn't sound that close
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