SciFi Haiku

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MysterMenace
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SciFi Haiku

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A Brief History of Extraterrestrial Encounters

Pre-Contact

Humans are cunning,
Inventive but devious.
Something must be done.

Post-Contact

The humans are gone.
Nothing remains but samples,
In jars . . . just in case.
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Post by melel_jo »

Ooh, in love with the last line. I dig the tone, sly and scheming.
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I like this!
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Thank you for your comments. They are very encouraging.
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Post by Tobewankenobe »

I like the story this tells! Very nice rhythm, too. It reminds me of those alien comics that have two aliens talking about their life on earth. I think the artists name is Nate something. I'll update if I learn more.
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This is a great piece. I love it.
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This line 'Nothing remains but samples', I liked it. Precisely wrote. Great job.
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Post by Sherry Barrow »

This is a good poem in that it is a six line work with concise expression evoking stimulating images. Not to be harsh... it isn't actually haiku, though.
Please don't be upset by my honest feedback. I am only offering helpful information.
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