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You don't need friends.
You need people
Who will listen to your language,
Who will understand your language,
And will accurately respond to that language.

It's important to have friends.
But what is the point of having many friends
Who will not listen to you,
Who will not understand you,
And who will constantly try to mold you
To fit in their selfish standards.

Finding a better friend is hard work.
Find a friend who will respect your privacy.
Find a friend who will not try to control you.
Find a friend who will genuinely help if need be.
Find a friend who will encourage you to maintain a positive attitude.

A genuine friend is a good listener.
A genuine friend is respectful.
A genuine friend builds up.
A genuine friend allows you to practice your free will.
A genuine friend will walk with you through thick and thin.
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Post by DATo »

This poem can serve as an instructive and valuable primer on what a true friend is. If people read this poem when they are young and profit from its lesson it will save them an enormous amount of anguish in later years.

Nice poem Nerea!!!
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DATo wrote: 14 Oct 2021, 07:10 This poem can serve as an instructive and valuable primer on what a true friend is. If people read this poem when they are young and profit from its lesson it will save them an enormous amount of anguish in later years.

Nice poem Nerea!!!
I totally agree with you, the early the better. I appreciate your positive feedback on my poem. :tiphat:
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I think sometimes we're so lonely that we look for company without distinguishing the good from the bad, but anyone looking to distinguish the two can look no further, as this poem of yours does a great job of doing just that.

Well done.
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Thank you for the lovely poem, Nerea. I liked the gentle flow and repetition of certain words and ideas.
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Brett Linette wrote: 13 Nov 2021, 16:19 I think sometimes we're so lonely that we look for company without distinguishing the good from the bad, but anyone looking to distinguish the two can look no further, as this poem of yours does a great job of doing just that.

Well done.
Yeah, you are right. Desperation can cause one to make bad choices of friends. Thank you for your kind comment :tiphat:
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Susan Gibbs wrote: 19 Nov 2021, 09:46 Thank you for the lovely poem, Nerea. I liked the gentle flow and repetition of certain words and ideas.
I appreciate you taking your time to read and comment on the poem :tiphat:
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Nerea wrote: 26 Nov 2021, 06:15
Brett Linette wrote: 13 Nov 2021, 16:19 I think sometimes we're so lonely that we look for company without distinguishing the good from the bad, but anyone looking to distinguish the two can look no further, as this poem of yours does a great job of doing just that.

Well done.
Yeah, you are right. Desperation can cause one to make bad choices of friends. Thank you for your kind comment :tiphat:
Thank you for sharing that poem of yours. It was an honor to read.
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Well-thought-out. Slight personal touch - maybe if you'd repeated the first 2 lines at the very end. But otherwise, I enjoyed the self-awareness of your ideas. Lovely poem.
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