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Use this forum to post poetry that you have written. This is for getting comments and constructive feedback. This is for original, creative works. You must post the actual text, no links. Only one poem per topic please.
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thisgirl818
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Love me,
Love me so much
'Till it hurts
So you'll know
Why I cry every night
With the thought of him.

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Oh wow, reading this one hurt. You really hit something inside me with this. The poem is beautiful. Well done.

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Post by Jinxxuxx »

It's alright however it's a bit too vague for my taste meaning I could have easily predicted what you was going to say next.
Most people like to be surprised when reading works like this ~ just a friendly opinion ^ ^

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Post by Tobewankenobe »

I hope writing these poems helped you like it's helping me.

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Post by Aliciaroseperry1992 »

I don't see how the title reflects the poem, but I see this having potential!

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