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Abhu
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A young matured Sara, a 23-year-old girl lives with their parents who are very concerned about her marriage because her proposal for alliance gets rejected every time. At last a proposal arrived from their relatives who is Babu lived with his mother and a younger sister. Although he is a handsome, calm boy and his parents are prior to all the other. They get engaged and get married within one year, soonly Sara understands that his husband has no job and they are living a poor life. Their life runs with some ups and downs. Sara gets pregnant, then she feels that something happens miserably when she is an eight-month pregnancy. Sara's mother brings her to the home town, in between that Sara's sister in law gets engaged and married. After two months, Sara delivered a baby boy who is very cute and exactly like her father. Babu named his son as his father's name but within the nineteen days from his birth he died. Sara broke down and she spends her time alone. After a year, she gets pregnant again and also the same miserable thing happens again the baby is miscarried. Sara feels like, she lost her life and blamed herself for everything. She prayed for a baby every time to a god and a miracle happen Sara get to carry and also from the help of their neighbor family she came to know that the miserable things happen it's because of the house. Their house has some evil spirit that kills their baby every time. Fortunately, Sara delivered a girl baby, but the baby got severe bleeding from her umblicord which is mistakenly cut by the doctor. The doctor told, to save the baby's life we need blood but Sara cannot donate her blood due to the weakness at the time, Babu blood type gets a match with the baby's blood and the baby gets saved. After that baby and Sara came to their home, the baby gets sick again if they cured, again fall in another problem. Sara noticed some unusual things happen at their house someone tries to press her neck, a huge voice of 'get out from my house' and a big slap on her face from a big monster in her dream. Sara planned to visit a holy place where a man who is the master of the holy spirit, they told ever happenings to him, the man replied if u love your baby they get confused, the man shouted that "if you want that baby or not" babu replied, yes I want my baby. If so then get out of your house otherwise you lossed your baby, Sara starts crying the man replied your house is filled with many evil spirits which not want to start your generation. It is the better option for you people to save your life too. Then Babu, Sara, baby, and his mother get out of their own house, eventhough they have no money they believe their baby gives them a "new life".
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Loosing a child can lead mothers to depression. Glad that Sara and Babu finally salvage their family. It's a nice read but maybe you can check on correcting the tenses.
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