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A young man with a very neat appearance came to an office. He hopes to be accepted at the company and can work there comfortably. Therefore, he prepared the material and also the need for a job interview very well. Arriving at the company.

There was the sound of people knocking on the door from outside.

"Please enter!" Replied Mr. Toni from the room.

"Sorry, is Pak Toni there?" Asked one of the young men who got a job interview call.

"No, come out!"


"Where is Mr. Toni? Why is the one inside OB? "The young man asked one of the officers in the wild room.

"The one inside is Mr. Toni. He is often like that, pretending to be an OB to test his employees, "explained the officer.

"What do you mean?"

"That means we don't get away today. Mr. Toni is like that. He used to know because of the material with several employees. "

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Post by ndawiti »

Theme problem despite the heading " PERSONAL EXPERIENCE" gives way to ideas like 'job hunting' or ' new arrival in town' . So subject is put in a way devoid of the subject or story which may have prompted the writing. Is it meant to focus on the exchange between the writer and Receptionist ? Or is it meant to reflect the unfriendliness of the people at the new place?
Structured basics of this text as far as I know may be as folloWS;
Content or Story
Conclusion or summary.
The story in this form, is lijke an excerpt.


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I can't really comprehend the story.
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