Children Story: How to Be a Good Big Sibling

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Re: Children Story: How to Be a Good Big Sibling

Post by Amagine » 31 Oct 2017, 22:34

Njengnjoro wrote:Great work of art, evoked a lot of emotions.
Thank you! :D
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Post by PaeonkaE » 22 Nov 2017, 11:47

This poem is covering a field which usually gets forgotten in the big tumult of preparing the coming of a new baby in the house. The bigger siblings get immediately in the shadows and all the adult attention is focused on the new comer. (This I speak from experience as a bigger sibling.) It is very hurting and bitter for all the older children to lose the parents attention and admiration in a moment and as if get forgotten. They think to be less important and less loved. This story is a nice example how one may prepare the older children in the family to understand the big event and get a part of it. My best recommendations!

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Post by Amagine » 27 Nov 2017, 00:23

PaeonkaE wrote:This poem is covering a field which usually gets forgotten in the big tumult of preparing the coming of a new baby in the house. The bigger siblings get immediately in the shadows and all the adult attention is focused on the new comer. (This I speak from experience as a bigger sibling.) It is very hurting and bitter for all the older children to lose the parents attention and admiration in a moment and as if get forgotten. They think to be less important and less loved. This story is a nice example how one may prepare the older children in the family to understand the big event and get a part of it. My best recommendations!
Thank you so much! I truly appreciate it! :D ?
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Post by CambaReviewer » 13 Feb 2018, 07:24

This was awesome!! Please consider publishing as a picture book. I think it will easily find its way into lots of family bookshelves and would make a good new baby gift for older siblings. I liked it very much! Well done!

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Post by Monee1995 » 14 Feb 2018, 18:07

This was a heart warming reading. I loved how you were preparing he or she for their new sibling by explaining something's that they can do to become a good sibling. I think this will make the child not to feel left out.

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