Ones beaten twice shy

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Emmidosky
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Ones beaten twice shy

Post by Emmidosky » 14 Oct 2018, 03:14

Terna was staying with his uncle in Ibadan. He loved staying in Ibadan because of so many reasons best known to him, He loved playing football but his problem was that, his uncle was so rude and brave, He always have problem with his wife, which he might be involved whether he is at home or not at the moment.
One day, He went out to play football with his friends, on his way back, He met his uncle on with two police men. Uncle! Where are u going with the police men? He asked, I am going to the police station, He replied, your Aunty has reported me to the police that I stole her money.

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Post by Sumra Abbas » 18 Oct 2018, 09:38

Does being rude and brave was the same reason that repelled his wife, whome were attracting little Terna.

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Post by Brianvex Ojwach » 05 Feb 2019, 04:55

The reply uncle have was right

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Post by jolener23 » 24 Feb 2019, 16:52

Intriguing story

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Post by amsula_2018 » 10 Mar 2019, 01:18

Kind a weird that brave and rude are used. Brave is a positive term and it kind a contradicts rude. Just my opinion.
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