Flow of the Book and Development of Characters

Use this forum to discuss the June 2019 Book of the month, "Cynthia and Dan: Cyber War" by Dorothy May Mercer.
Ghost11111
Posts: 48
Joined: 09 May 2019, 10:37
Currently Reading:
Bookshelf Size: 20
Reviewer Page: onlinebookclub.org/reviews/by-ghost11111.html
Latest Review: Sundown by Carl H. Mitchell

Re: Flow of the Book and Development of Characters

Post by Ghost11111 »

This book had a very jagged plot flow, if any. Even if this book is a part of a series, there still needs to be drastically more details included in the book along with any important information from the previous books. Even the Harry Potter series started out each new book with a recap of what had happened from the beginning onward. There was also very little character development and the little bit that did occur tended to clash with other pre-defined characteristics. It is hard to believe that the smart, security savvy Cynthia at the beginning of the book has anything in common with the dim witted submissive Cynthia in the romance scenes.

User avatar
RoxieReads
Posts: 197
Joined: 28 Jun 2019, 20:10
2019 Reading Goal: 5
2019 Reading Goal Completion: 280
Currently Reading:
Bookshelf Size: 16
Reviewer Page: onlinebookclub.org/reviews/by-roxiereads.html
Latest Review: Code Name Lily by Julien Ayotte

Post by RoxieReads »

When a book has such flawed characters you need to have more reason for these flaws, otherwise they are these terrible characters that no one enjoys reading about. I didn’t like any of the characters in this book except for Tim and Garth. They were the only ones who seemed to get something done.

User avatar
Allyseria
Posts: 456
Joined: 18 Jul 2018, 16:33
2018 Reading Goal: 50
2018 Reading Goal Completion: 58
Currently Reading:
Bookshelf Size: 90
Reviewer Page: onlinebookclub.org/reviews/by-allyseria.html
Latest Review: Choosing Happiness by Emily Hunter Slingluff

Post by Allyseria »

The flow was so odd. Nothing's worse than having a bad flow and weird transitions. It just took me out of the story each time and made it that much easier to put the book down.

User avatar
pshaw1414
Posts: 357
Joined: 23 Apr 2019, 14:27
2019 Reading Goal: 10
2019 Reading Goal Completion: 240
Currently Reading:
Bookshelf Size: 84
Reviewer Page: onlinebookclub.org/reviews/by-pshaw1414.html
Latest Review: Dying Well by Susan Ducharme Hoben

Post by pshaw1414 »

Yeah I feel that this book is meant to appeal to a younger audience. It was very bizzare how Sky and Cynthia met and then suddenly were in love.

User avatar
lauren3cats
Posts: 17
Joined: 26 Jun 2019, 22:10
Currently Reading: A Girl Like You
Bookshelf Size: 15
Reviewer Page: onlinebookclub.org/reviews/by-lauren3cats.html
Latest Review: Invent, Innovate & Prosper by Michael G. Colburn

Post by lauren3cats »

I really enjoyed the flow of the Cyber War portion of the book. It caught my attention and pulled me through. I was really disappointed with the romantic development, however. Her relationship with sky was not allowed to develop in a realistic manner and that bothered me.

User avatar
kristib44
Posts: 22
Joined: 13 Jul 2019, 13:35
Currently Reading:
Bookshelf Size: 25
Reviewer Page: onlinebookclub.org/reviews/by-kristib44.html
Latest Review: Project Tau by Jude Austin

Post by kristib44 »

I definitely don't feel like there was any "flow." The development of the characters was nearly non-existant; I felt as if I were dumped into the middle of someone's life and was expected to know their life story. It didn't get any better as the story progressed. I have no idea why Sky was so quick to fall in love or if Dan had stalkerish tendencies before Cynthia, and I have no idea if falling for Sky was out of character for her or not.

User avatar
shravsi
Posts: 285
Joined: 01 Apr 2016, 01:01
Favorite Book:
Currently Reading: The Namesake
Bookshelf Size: 39
Reviewer Page: onlinebookclub.org/reviews/by-shravsi.html
Latest Review: Adrift by Charlie Sheldon

Post by shravsi »

I am also halfway through the book but I don't think I am too much keen to complete it. There isn't anything motivating enough. Not the storyline nor the characters.

RachelRovere
Posts: 16
Joined: 14 Jun 2019, 20:25
Currently Reading:
Bookshelf Size: 13
Reviewer Page: onlinebookclub.org/reviews/by-rachelrovere.html
Latest Review: Burn Zones by Jorge P. Newbery

Post by RachelRovere »

pshaw1414 wrote:
22 Jul 2019, 13:44
Yeah I feel that this book is meant to appeal to a younger audience. It was very bizzare how Sky and Cynthia met and then suddenly were in love.
It definitely has a Young Adult feel to the simplistic way it was written but I really hope no teen ever picks up this book. Dan, Cynthia and Sky set a HORRIBLE example of what a healthy relationship looks like. Stalking, cheating, and manipulation isn't something that needs to be equated to romance for teens.

User avatar
pshaw1414
Posts: 357
Joined: 23 Apr 2019, 14:27
2019 Reading Goal: 10
2019 Reading Goal Completion: 240
Currently Reading:
Bookshelf Size: 84
Reviewer Page: onlinebookclub.org/reviews/by-pshaw1414.html
Latest Review: Dying Well by Susan Ducharme Hoben

Post by pshaw1414 »

RachelRovere wrote:
03 Aug 2019, 17:46
pshaw1414 wrote:
22 Jul 2019, 13:44
Yeah I feel that this book is meant to appeal to a younger audience. It was very bizzare how Sky and Cynthia met and then suddenly were in love.
It definitely has a Young Adult feel to the simplistic way it was written but I really hope no teen ever picks up this book. Dan, Cynthia and Sky set a HORRIBLE example of what a healthy relationship looks like. Stalking, cheating, and manipulation isn't something that needs to be equated to romance for teens.
Absolutely agree!

User avatar
dcw
Posts: 25
Joined: 18 Jul 2019, 15:12
Favorite Author: Louisa May Alcott
Currently Reading:
Bookshelf Size: 151
Reviewer Page: onlinebookclub.org/reviews/by-dcw.html
Latest Review: Looking Glass Friends by E L Neve
fav_author_id: 332

Post by dcw »

I just recently finished this book and I agree with you completely. The main characters seemed to lack development. I felt as though the storylines were rushed, particularly between Cynthia and Sky. And at times, it became unrealistic. for me. I finished reading the book but unfortunately, I did not particularly enjoy it.

User avatar
Bretagne
Posts: 17
Joined: 18 Apr 2019, 20:49
Favorite Author: Diana Wynne Jones
Currently Reading:
Bookshelf Size: 19
Reviewer Page: onlinebookclub.org/reviews/by-bretagne.html
Latest Review: The Message? by Avam Hale
fav_author_id: 3288

Post by Bretagne »

I'm not sure I'd feel confident saying that the characters really develop. I felt like they didn't really undergo any revolutionary changes. There are some intense moments and scenarios in the book, and yet the characters felt unchanged. The flat characters was actually my biggest complaint with the whole story.

As for the flow of the story, I didn't mind the bouncing between story lines too much, especially since the author does bring all the characters together everyone once in a while. However, I do think the story would have benefited from more attention on one story line rather than the sporadic updates.

User avatar
Brandy C
Posts: 106
Joined: 28 Jan 2019, 23:11
Currently Reading: A Discovery of Witches
Bookshelf Size: 33
Reviewer Page: onlinebookclub.org/reviews/by-brandy-c.html
Latest Review: Cynthia and Dan by Dorothy May Mercer

Post by Brandy C »

I agree the plot is choppy and all over the place. I could not connect with any of the characters. In my opinion, the chapters seemed undeveloped and flat. Cynthia’s character is very contradictory. One minute she is strong and independent and the next she is clueless and dependent on Skye! I tried hard to get into this book but sadly I could not.
”You never really understand a person until you consider things from his point of view..Until you climb inside of his skin and walk around in it” Harper Lee, To Kill A Mockingbird

Felicity Granger
Posts: 114
Joined: 22 Jun 2019, 22:29
Currently Reading:
Bookshelf Size: 11
Reviewer Page: onlinebookclub.org/reviews/by-felicity-granger.html
Latest Review: We are Voulhire: A New Arrival under Great Skies by Matthew Tysz

Post by Felicity Granger »

I saw little to any development of any of the characters. At all. Sky kinda has this lecher, creep thing going on and the whole instant love trope was just not blended with the story. When Cynthia tries to justify her cheating, I was just fed up. The plot was convoluted and evoked too many negative feelings when it came on to the three's relationship hubble-bubble.

User avatar
Sana Rabbani
Posts: 23
Joined: 05 Aug 2019, 15:17
Currently Reading: Geraldine
Bookshelf Size: 11
Reviewer Page: onlinebookclub.org/reviews/by-sana-rabbani.html
Latest Review: Man Mission by Eytan Uliel

Post by Sana Rabbani »

maggi3 wrote:
02 Jun 2019, 01:25
heatherashley7 wrote:
01 Jun 2019, 17:08
It also bothered me how one minute Sky was the perfect gentleman and than the next was more like a childish teenager. Example, calling himself "sugar daddy", and then upon meeting again in Glenn's office rushing to her and kissing her hands. I'm not sure about you but that does not scream manly, much less someone of high importance in the military.

Overall this book seemed like a good read for a teenager, minus the whole pregnancy and miscarriage.

What are your thoughts on Sky's multiple characteristics?
I wonder if the childish characteristics were intended to make him more relatable to younger people. It didn’t work out that way, though. I thought he came off as creepy and a bit obsessive to be honest.
I agree to this completely. Although, I'm half way through reading it but still it seems quite like it.

SomeoneInTheWorld
Posts: 535
Joined: 13 Sep 2019, 06:41
Currently Reading:
Bookshelf Size: 27
Reviewer Page: onlinebookclub.org/reviews/by-someoneintheworld.html
Latest Review: Elvenfold Hammerquest by Brex Francorum

Post by SomeoneInTheWorld »

I agree. There were so many things about the characters and the flow of events that didn't make sense. Maybe if we got the chance to see what happens in the minds and hearts of the characters we would understand them better and relate more to the story, but it didn't happen.

Post Reply

Return to “Discuss "Cynthia and Dan: Cyber War" by Dorothy May Mercer”