That's a really good point about Dick and Jane, I was trying to think of a good example of simplistic writing + interesting enough story, and you hit the nail on the head.Bianka Walter wrote: ↑01 Jul 2018, 10:24 This was my biggest problem with this story. I don't think it needs to be one or the other. Especially if there are follow-on books. There could have been a bit more depth to the story, while keeping the sentences simple enough to read and understand.
If Dick and Jane could do it, I'm sure Toni can too.
Repetitive Sentences vs. An Interesting Storyline
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Re: Repetitive Sentences vs. An Interesting Storyline
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You know, as much as Dick and Jane get put down, they are a duo that EVERYONE knows. The sentences are simple to the point of, "Run, Dick, run."haleygerstenberg wrote: ↑18 Jul 2018, 14:55That's a really good point about Dick and Jane, I was trying to think of a good example of simplistic writing + interesting enough story, and you hit the nail on the head.Bianka Walter wrote: ↑01 Jul 2018, 10:24 This was my biggest problem with this story. I don't think it needs to be one or the other. Especially if there are follow-on books. There could have been a bit more depth to the story, while keeping the sentences simple enough to read and understand.
If Dick and Jane could do it, I'm sure Toni can too.
How can that possibly be interesting?
But their story had pulp. I don't think there is a comparison, really.
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Exactly my opinions, I second you.dflanky247 wrote: ↑19 Jul 2018, 02:52 I think for a children's book, a repetitive structure is important for the kids to learn to read. Since this book has follow-ups the child may be potent enough later on to understand and indulge in the story, so the author should try making her upcoming books more focused on plot and make it interesting.
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When children are first beginning to transition from baby books to chapter books, repetitive sentences are quite useful for them. For books like this, I believe that the author was more interested in helping the child learn how to read instead of putting together an actual plot. Not having much of an interesting story can bore you, I understand that completely. It tends to make the book drag on and doesn't leave an impression on you. However, for this book I do believe that the way it was written was better for education purposes than entertainment.bookowlie wrote: ↑01 Jul 2018, 08:34 Having simple repetitive sentences in a children's book helps kids learn to read. However, it makes the story less interesting because there is either a weak plot or no plot at all. In this case, there wasn't even steps in the plot such as a character baking a cake from beginning to end. Instead, there were just a different activity shown on each page. Would the lack of a traditional plot make a child less interested or would the child love the book even more because they could master the words quicker and gain confidence?
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I agree with your point. The book may not be as interesting for adults as it is for children because of repetition. We can hope that in next books the author will come up with a new style and topics regarding Toni's personality to ward off this boredom.Anthony Martial Tata wrote: ↑21 Jul 2018, 00:21 An adult reader could find the book boring as a result of the excessive repetition. But believe your me, such is what is needed to get the child's mastery of the book.